Áine100WC#4

Once there were three animals, a horse, a Goat and a Bull. They lived on a farm in Yorkshire. Every day their Farmer (Pat),woke them up, gave them their food and looked after them, but today they had a new Farmer(Miss Bent-broom.) She was very strange looking! She took them into the barns and said,”If you want to live, let me practise a spell on you.” They agreed because they didn’t want to die. Miss Bent-broom pointed a strange stick at them and said , ” Kasaso debongi.” There was a loud bang and the animals froze like statues… because they had turned into stone!

2 thoughts on “Áine100WC#4

  1. Hi Aine,

    This is a really nice piece, a great use of the prompt! This week’s prompt is an image of three mysterious animal headed figures. Bringing visual effect to the words, you describe a setting which follows a character in a rural setting, animals on a farm. By setting out the plot early in the piece, the animals’ routine, you create a structure which gives the piece stability and puts the reader in the centre of the action. Using this makes the reader feel attached to the piece, and makes them more engaged. This makes the piece interesting right from the start. This theme of animals is one that many will be familiar with, even in their own personal lives, as most people have experienced seeing animals at some point in their life. This makes it very relatable to the reader. This makes the reader imagine such a visual description of the setting as a whole. I can relate to this too as I have also enjoyed spending time with animals, whether that be with pets or enjoying time at farms or zoos. By explaining clearly the atmosphere, such as how there usual farmer was not present, you engage with the reader and add to the setting. You use imagery which fits perfectly with the setting. Bringing in specific information like the farmers’ names, Pat and BentBroom, demonstrates great imagination. This puts the reader in the front of the story, and this really makes you focus on the piece. The piece continues to develop, as the farmer is not there, and a new shadowy figure emerges. With the new farmer coming in, you create a sense of disruption which is very effective, and the animals’ sheer fear of the new farmer is really palpable. The ending of them being turned into stone is a shock ending, and really captures the reader in feeling sorry for the animals. Good use of grammar and punctuation too, especially your use of quotation marks. Keep up the good work!

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